In this blog post I will be creating a new scene in the short story Bullet in the Brain (Tobias Wolff). Also, I will be writing a short scene from my life that includes symbolism. As Anders is staring up at the ceiling, having flashbacks on his childhood, he wonders is this really it? But the robber brings his gun down from under Ander’s chin. “If you say one more smart thing you're done old man” The robber says as he stares Anders down. Anders slowly nods his head. The robbers make their way over to the tellers. “I want every one of these bags full of cash!” The tellers quickly do as the man with the guns say. What the robbers didn’t expect, was there to there to be an undercover policeman in line. He was waiting for the perfect moment, for the robbers not to notice him. The robbers focus is one the tellers, so the cop takes his chance. “Drop your weapons now!” says the undercover cop, showing his badge to the robbers. The robbers hesitate, but they dont drop their weapons. One of them raises his gun to the cop but before he can shoot, the cop shoots first and kills the robber. The second robber shoots the cop right in his chest, and he instantly falls to the ground, and is bleeding out. Now there are two dead bodies on the ground, and the second robber looks a bit uneasy. “Come on, move it! Move it! All the cash you got now!” The tellers continue to stuff the money into the bags. About five minutes later the robber is out the door, with all four bags of stolen cash.
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9/29/2018 09:58:10 pm
Hey!
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Devon
10/1/2018 10:09:49 am
i really enjoyed the way you changed the progression of the story
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